literature

Once Bitten

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I'm writing about you
again.
My phantom limb,
my phantom heart.  
I reach for you before
the memories hit
and hit hard.
Like before,
fear swirls in my blood.
It's not the first time, either.

Thoughts on whether the last two lines are necessary?
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joufancyhuh's avatar
to end on hit and hit hard might come off as a bit cliche. the way you continue past that in the final two lines, totally necessary for avoiding that.